WALT : write a paragraph writing about this picture
A man Looks really dirty, scruffy and untidy. He is in the disgusting house that it looks like he is
poor as he sitting down in the damp house. He can’t go anywhere he is stuck in the damp
house, he doesn’t know what to do.
A man Looks really dirty, scruffy and untidy. He is in the disgusting house that it looks like he is
poor as he sitting down in the damp house. He can’t go anywhere he is stuck in the damp
house, he doesn’t know what to do.
Sometimes, he can hear a creaky noise outside that made him feel scared because it is so dark
out there that you would never see anything as he would move along in the damp house.
He looks like he is sad because he was in the house feeling lonely, scared and nervous.
out there that you would never see anything as he would move along in the damp house.
He looks like he is sad because he was in the house feeling lonely, scared and nervous.
As his tears slowly trickle down his face he can taste the salty tears. His nose is starting to drip
like a tap. He wipes his nose with his dirty arm. The house inside looks really poor and it would
smell disgusting like dirt and rubbish dump.
like a tap. He wipes his nose with his dirty arm. The house inside looks really poor and it would
smell disgusting like dirt and rubbish dump.
I feel sorry for him because he is in a disgusting house and he is very dirty, scruffy and untidy
and he feels really lonely. The creaky noise makes him feel frightened and he doesn’t know
what it is. He is worried about scary people or animals coming to get him.
and he feels really lonely. The creaky noise makes him feel frightened and he doesn’t know
what it is. He is worried about scary people or animals coming to get him.
What I've enjoyed : is working on this writing because I like to do some descriptive words in
my Writing.
My next step : could be add a bit more to the writing so it could stand out but I've done a
great job.
my Writing.
My next step : could be add a bit more to the writing so it could stand out but I've done a
great job.
Description : Our Teacher let us write a Paragraph Writing about this picture and we have to use a lot of descriptive words in our writing.
Hi Sara, I like how you used a lot of descriptive words in this piece of writing. Maybe next time though you could include the WALT in, and tell us what you found hard, fun, and easy. Other than that, keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteWell done, I can see you have worked hard to use words that make links between your paragraph here. Keep up the great work.
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