Persuasive Writing Part 2

WALT : write a Persuasive Writing about anything we want

We need to make animals happy

I believe that we should make our cupcakes perfect because every person likes to have cupcakes instead
of muffins

It needs to have the right ingredients to their cupcakes, and so with the icing
(because it will taste amazing. Choosing your favorite designing the cupcakes on top is making it better.

Check if it has the right flavor, what size do you want to make it stand out, how much you want and the
taste of it that makes everyone happy and it can’t stop eating it, and what is your favorite food coloring
in the icing.                  

Your mother or father can give you a surprise of a perfect cupcake to bring it to school and showing
them to your friends and they would be jealous of you. Then the taste comes from the cupcake feels the
absolute joy that people want to eat it.

Some people like the taste of it because the flavor to the cupcake tastes great and a lot of children
around the world like to have cupcakes but you can not have it all the time.

That is why A lot of people like cupcakes because what makes cupcakes perfect is when you add
right ingredients same with icing and the designing and they would think it would taste amazing.

What I've enjoyed : Working on this writing about we need to make animals happy

My next step: Some more searching about making animals happy and write it in my own words

Description : This week our teacher let us write a Persuasive Writing about anything we want and if you are not sure on what are you going to write then we had to use the gallery to help us to write something.

Persuasive writing

WALT : write a Persuasive Writing about anything we want

What makes a cupcake perfect?

I believe that we should make our cupcakes perfect because every person likes to have cupcakes instead
of muffins

It needs to have the right ingredients to their cupcakes, and so with the icing
(because it will taste amazing. Choosing your favorite designing the cupcakes on top is making it better.

Check if it has the right flavor, what size do you want to make it stand out, how much you want and the
taste of it that makes everyone happy and it can’t stop eating it, and what is your favorite food coloring
in the icing.                  

Your mother or father can give you a surprise of a perfect cupcake to bring it to school and showing
them to your friends and they would be jealous of you. Then the taste comes from the cupcake feels the
absolute joy that people want to eat it.

Some people like the taste of it because the flavor to the cupcake tastes great and a lot of children
around the world like to have cupcakes but you can not have it all the time.

That is why A lot of people like cupcakes because what makes cupcakes perfect is when you add
right ingredients same with icing and the designing and they would think it would taste amazing.

What I've enjoyed : Working on this writing about what makes a cupcake perfect

My next step: add a bit more detail to my work.

Description : This week our teacher let us write a Persuasive Writing about anything we want and if you are not sure on what are you going to write then we had to use the gallery to help us to write something.

Paragraph Writing

WALT : write a paragraph writing about this picture

A man Looks really dirty, scruffy and untidy. He is in the disgusting house that it looks like he is
poor as he sitting down in the damp house. He can’t go anywhere he is stuck in the damp
house, he doesn’t know what to do.
  

Sometimes, he can hear a creaky noise outside that made him feel scared because it is so dark
out there that you would never see anything as he would move along in the damp house.
He looks like he is sad because he was in the house feeling lonely, scared and nervous. 

As his tears slowly trickle down his face he can taste the salty tears. His nose is starting to drip
like a tap. He wipes his nose with his dirty arm. The house inside looks really poor and it would
smell disgusting like dirt and rubbish dump. 

I feel sorry for him because he is in a disgusting house and he is very dirty, scruffy and untidy
and he feels really lonely. The creaky noise makes him feel frightened and he doesn’t know
what it is. He is worried about scary people or animals coming to get him.

What I've enjoyed : is working on this writing because I like to do some descriptive words in
my Writing.

My next step : could be add a bit more to the writing so it could stand out but I've done a
great job.

Description : Our Teacher let us write a Paragraph Writing about this picture and we have to use a lot of descriptive words in our writing.